Atlantis
AtlantisI've allowed my museto run with this vision;luminous, monstrous,inanely preposterous.Now I can see the rising,the mysteries unveiled;numinous, lustrousthe enigma revealedand I sleep not for...
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Very nice, Carly, the enigma as well as the rhythm and words you caught it in.Leny
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Thanks, Leny - I took a coupla' tucks in it so it now reads like so . . .I've allowed my museto run with this vision;luminous, monstrous . . .inanely preposterous.Now I can see the rising,the mystery...
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Hello Carly,I think I prefer the original, without the dots, maybe a hyphen instead? But I do like your new last line, without And. Leny
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Hummmmm I agree with Leny, Carly, hyphens would be good or as is. Partir cst mourir un peu.
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Carly, This is FANTASTIC! If Atlantis heard your thoughts it would rise from the sea.Goodnight Lady,Lorraine
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Nothing quite like the visions our minds see. So often, for me, whether or good or bad, they make reality feel a little dull..."dull' ... being quite different than your poem.Enjoyed!--Road
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